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Be Descriptive but not Overly Descriptive by Marianne Scott

Writers not only have to make readers feel like they are present in the scene, but have to entice them to stay and continue reading. I love it when I read a book and find myself transported into another world. The world around me vanishes as I turn the pages.

The necessary ingredient is vivid description. Readers need to identify with a situation in a story, to see and feel themselves in the scene. Here is where skillful crafting comes in, by choosing the right descriptive words to form subconscious pictures, kind of like a movie but in your mind. These sensorial vivid environments invite the reader to come inside.

It’s a fine line between too much and too little detail. Sometimes to provide all the visual information necessary, a writer can go overboard. Painting a verbal picture is more than pulling out your dictionary of adjectives and stringing them in front of every noun in your novel. Suppose you were describing an exotic garden where two people are about to meet. How would you go about describing such a visual and sensory place?

Imagine the overload of red, pink, white, and orange beds of exotic flowers, mixed among the dark green, chartreuse, emerald leafy, and grassy background of the garden. It’s a true testament to the meticulous obsessive dedication of the caretakers of Butchart  Gardens, all experts of maintaining such splendid beauty.

Oops! I think I just exhausted my reader. Excessive use of adjectives or other modifiers is not the answer. Choosing your descriptors is particularly important when you consider what your story is about and how much weight to lend to each detail. This garden could be the setting for an intriguing plot. Yet while this is important to make the setting as vivid as possible, the actual landscape is not part of the developing story.

Now consider the image as a place where an encounter with a villain is about to take place, the protagonist having been lured by a text message from a stalker to a specific spot for an exchange of information… or worse.

“Standing at the top of a staircase that led down to the noose-like pathway flanked by a patchwork of flower beds in bloom, Tamara scanned over the exotic specimens laid out over Butchart Gardens for signs of her stalker. She paused before descending into the colorful valley of plants and shrubs. Beyond the gardens, the mountains were framed by a misted sky. She shivered despite the warm morning sun while she verified the message on her cell phone. “Meet Maurice by the Sequoia grove past the totems.”

When describing a setting, adjectives are less important than capturing the essence of the setting through the context of the moment in the story. In “…the pathway flanked by a patchwork of flower beds,” the metaphor is more descriptive than the colors of the flowers. Also, “the noose-like pathway” is Fewer words might be more descriptive.